It's hypnotizing, the way the rain falls.
While I look to the clouds with open eyes,
I see the origin of the heaven's tears.
But its cool and it hurts like cold steel.
The rain drenches me, and still the violins play on.
The gods cry to music of beauty.
And I've lost control. I've lost myself,
To memories that overwhelm.
I stand here, Bereft of hate, my pleading eyes,
Drenched under a pouring sky.
And its only you that I can feel,
While I drown in rain in this sightless night.
I remember how your words would make me feel,
There is a chill running through me.
I remember how you'd make me breathe slow and deep,
But the present rain wouldn't let me.
I'm spinning out of control,
Under an onslaught of memories, And this rain...
I yearn for a light to guide me home,
But the dark clouds have taken my light.
And the memories, Oh Maker!
You told me you'd paint my words on canvas white,
And never leave while I had a tear still left.
Where are you now when the rain is my tears?
And these words are flowing blind.
There are black mountains on the right,
And A valley looms on the other side.
But its not a road my darling, my love.
I'm trapped in my mind's embrace.
Beyond your mountain, are you, a stranger now,
And in the valley lies blissful ignorance.
Where shall I make my love go to?
I've tried crossing your mountain, I can't.
And I can't stand being ignorant.
So I'll march on ahead,
If only this rain would let me see.
I'm cold, and I'm dying inside.
I'm lost, Yes I've lost control.
I'm lost and the rain is steel lances.
But the music guides me on,
The violins in crescendo have risen,
Don't let our song die.
I only have memories, And this song.
But still the rain, threatens to wash me away.
In a cold embrace O Maker preserve us.
Yes I've lost control.
Sunday, September 5, 2010
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Interesting flow of thoughts. Not bad not bad
ReplyDeleteWell Sid, this is nearly a recreation of what goes on inside my head. Just cut out the gooey love part.
ReplyDeleteToo bad, you're gooey and full of love. =]
ReplyDeleteIt's sweet. I like how the form seemed to mock the breaking down of feel of the words.
some of it I feel didn't fit together quite right, with the references to the rain in some odd places. But in the end, still really liked it. Reminded me of a feeling that we all end up feeling. . .
You bastard. =D
Lost Control by Anathema...I love the song. Plus it was raining heavily last night :D
ReplyDeleteOhhh and no Rachel, I'm not full of shit :D
nice wrk...is it really fr smone spl...or is dat loneliness is ur g/f??
ReplyDeleteNeither Aparna...Its just a state of mind and my mind making up stuff.
ReplyDeleteI'm marveling over the amount of money you'd make if this shit were published.
ReplyDeleteWhen you're a gazillionare, remember it was I who gave you the idea and split it 50/50 with me.
Its just a state of mind and my mind making up stuff.
ReplyDelete*disagrees.
Its too honest to be framed. from the mind. only the call inside you, the love, the call will write this.
my opinion. will stick to it.
this was straight and simple. yet very transparent.
likes.
Loved it!
ReplyDeleteSpecially the 2nd stanza! \m/
Its not FOR someone...And its not from my love for anyone. Jaysus H. Christ people...stop mutilating me :P
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